Could you offer some criticizm on this short story?

wow this story was really amazing...im not going to lie i was just about to leave it because i really didnt have the time to read a story this long..but i thought id read a little then a little became more and more until i read the whole thing i really got hooked into it..again this story was..amazing..was it a tornado not just a storm? and my heart literally jumped when i figured out "P" stood for preston..right? (sniff sniff (lol)) plz...finish it..and email me it..if you can..